Wednesday, 26 October 2016
WALT: To retell a past event.
WILF: Correct structure
Wake up mum yelled!! It’s time to go to Whangarei pools. I ignored her because I was tired. On the second Saturday in the Holidays my family and me were at Whangarei pools.
Me and my brother were having a race. In the pool it was long at the end is very deep.
After That I went into the Spa pools it was warm. Then I went into the wave pools it splashed me in the face and I got knocked over.
In the slides it was dark in one in the other it was light I went into the light one just to be safe but when I went into the dark one. I thought it was the best.
After that fun we had same Sandwiches and I said to my mum we Should come here on Drift’s birthday so he could go on the slide because he was too young.
I felt exhausted from the fun we had. As i walked out of the building I thought ‘It was a fun day!
Wednesday, 12 October 2016
WALT: Write a short paragraph
My worst day was staying home because it was boring and there was nothing to do.
WALT: Recraft our writing
Show not tell
There's nothing to do! Nowhere to go!! It's raining AGAIN!! I hate The rain! Its ruining my holiday. This XBOX is getting BORING!!
Thursday, 15 September 2016
Purpose: To Entertain our audience
WALT: Construct a narrative with my partner.
WILF: Followed narrative structure
40 years ago in the deep blue sea lived a Crabapuss with huge fat bulging eyes an enormous slimy, long tentacles, and razor sharp snappy claws. His best friend was Sharktopus. He was half octopus and half shark. Sharktopus had six long legs and a big fin.
The sharktopus and the crabapuss were fighting Sharks then. Sharktopus told the sharks to stop but they did not listen. Crabapuss and Sharktopus hightailed away from the sharks. Then humans were diving in the sea. They tried to kill the Crabapuss and Sharktopus. The Sharks caught up. The humans tried to shoot Sharktopus. He dodged it And it hit one of the Sharks...Then Sharktopus and Crabapuss killed the Humans. The sharks are still chasing crabapuss and Sharktopus then octopuses came out of now were and helped Crabapuss and Sharktopus escape from the Sharks The octopuses done the Black staff, like a puff of black ink that comes out of their. Bottoms. They zoomed away from the Sharks. Then they lived happily ever after.